Comment One:

My first comment was on Lia Kim’s pitch. Her DA is based upon the future of vlogging. Her pitch detailed all of the points that needed to be covered. She clearly outlined her concept and highlighted her methodology. Her methodology is to film and edit videos weekly and then upload them. This process is the same as her production timeline, as she will get more feedback as each week goes on. It was a simple approach, which allowed her to clearly communicate the plans for her DA project. The only suggestions or criticisms I expressed was that her future time frame and public utility was not detailed enough.

The way that I could have improved my own comment on Lia’s post can be summarised in some dot points:

• A bigger focus on referring back to the subject lectures whilst providing feedback on the pitch execution itself.
• Articulate how…